A Collection of Original Poetry by Students of Ladysmith High School

Wednesday, 15 October 2014

Pryaska Goorhoo ~ "Far Above the Milky Way"

Far above the Milky Way                                                                                                                                                             People wanted the will to fight,                                                                                                                                            A beam of hope, a little golden ray.

Through dusk and through day,                                                                                                                                            Silent winds blow throughout the night,                                                                                                                                  Far above the Milky Way.

There is no yesterday, tomorrow or today.                                                                                                                       Violet horizons with that one golden flying kite.                                                                                                              A beam of hope, a little golden ray.

A perfection of hopelessness or a very tragic play?                                                                                                                  I often wonder about the many stars up there shining bright,                                                                                       Far above the Milky Way.

I laughed, I cried, however I still think its cliché.                                                                                                               Do you also wonder about some charming, mysterious knight?                                                                                       A beam of hope, a little golden ray?

Throughout this vast world I have searched, day by day.                                                                                                 My looking brighter, success within sight.                                                                                                                                 A beam of hope, a little golden ray…                                                                                                                                   Far above the Milky Way…


© Pryaska Goorhoo


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GRADE 9
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7 comments:

  1. Your poetry is magnificent and takes one to a different realm where anything is possible. Beautiful.

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  2. A beautiful example of a Villanelle.. the way the repetition of the refrain subtly change from repetition to repetition...

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  3. I love the repetition of that "beam of hope, a little golden ray." Your writing is very beautiful.

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  4. Excellent adherence to form. The vilanelle is lovely when done correctly, as you have. I also appreciate your use of color words which provide vivid imagery.

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  5. I want someone to sing this to me!

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  6. This poetic form is not easy to compose, and you have done a wonderful job! It has a lyrical quality and reads beautifully! Keep writing!

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